deadline is on dec 11, so i’ll need to get this ready at least by dec 7 or something. it’s a requirement for applying for a slot in the Ateneo Junior Summer Seminar, and i really want to join. please help me edit my essay…you can tell me which paragraphs i’d better omit, details i should include etc. btw, it’s unfinished. i don’t know what i should write as an extro or conclusion.
it’s about why the committee should choose me to represent my school in the AJSS. tell me if it sucks, because i have no experience whatsoever about these things. )
anyway here goes:
As long as facts or records are concerned, I’m just your average junior schoolgirl who takes her studies seriously but doesn’t exactly stand out. But there’s much more to me than my report card or the awards and certificates I receive; there is no room in the application form for dreams, aspirations, and attitude. These are what make up my character; these highlight me from the backdrop of the crowd.
I dream of being successful when I grow up (who doesn’t?). What exactly I’d like to be, though, is what I’m not yet sure of. When I was younger I wanted to be a lawyer, armed with books, brandishing a suitcase in court. Now, I’m not so sure. I have taken interest in a lot of things, like literature, music, psychology and math, and I donâ€™t know which one I’d like to pursue, hence my indecision about the course I will take in college.
That aside, for now I’m focusing on maximizing my potential by taking on challenges. By that, I don’t necessarily mean joining contests. I mean the simple kind of challenges wherein my opponent is myself. I like the sense of achievement when I succeed or the feeling of having learned something when I fail. In this frame of mind, I dare myself to read Shakespeare, I do Kumon Math (where I’m now learning advanced math without a tutor), and I try to learn a foreign language with the help of phrasebooks and online resources. I see the AJSS as a great opportunity I can benefit a lot from if I’m accepted. And especially since it will be held during summer vacation, a time when I’m idle and when development is almost stagnant. I’ll admit, though, that this is my first time to be willing to give up five weeks of summer to study. Actually, ‘willing’ might be too weak a word for it; I’ve already decided that if I can’t participate in the seminar, I will take free college courses online.
Having said that, Iâ€™m still, in part, a typical teenager. I love my family and friends, anime, music and the Internet. Music, in particular, is a large part of my life; I play the piano and the guitar, and there is not a day in which I fail to either blast tunes from my loudspeakers at home. In school during recess, I am usually seen with a cell phone in my hand and earphones plugged into my ears. I’m not much of a social butterfly, but I do get along well with everyone, whether it’s at school, in church, or anywhere else. I enjoy making friends, and if I get to join AJSS, I’ll be acquainted with dozens of honor students whom I’ll get to know more of as the weeks pass; a great experience for sure.